Grammar Correction Menulis Surat Lamaran Kerja

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Menulis Surat Bahasa Inggris
Grammar Correction dalam Penulisan Surat

Setelah selesai dengan contoh grammar correction pertama, saya dengan senang hati ingin share grammar correction kedua pada blog ini. Kalo yang pertama adalah summary, maka di tulisan yang ini, adalah contoh tulisan surat lamaran kerja. Langsung saja kita lihat tulisan original sebelum di koreksi.

To: summercamp@bt.com
From: Zulkhaidir Purwanto
Subject: Application

 Dear Mr. Richard Cunningham
I am writing to apply for the post of camp monitors for upcoming summer camps.
I received my bachelor degree three years ago and currently enroll in English course in Auckland University of Technology. I have a high level of English speaking ability (C1) as I am in advanced class in my course. Besides, I have travelled and received some short course programs in the US and Australia.

As you will see from my CV, I have some relevant experiences for this position. I worked as part time English teacher for four years while I was in University. I was also involved in English camps as facilitator in Indonesia. I am an extrovert person, and I like to work with children, also I am excellent in working as a team.

I am enthusiastic on working outdoor and arranging fun activities. I found managing people as an enjoyable works. I can also swim well and have some camping experience. I believe I am a good candidate for this position.

I attach a full CV, and if you require any further information, I would be happy to provide it. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Sincerely
Zulkhaidir Purwanto

Dari tulisan diatas, saya diberikan beberapa koreksi, yang hasilnya seperti di bawah ini:

 To: summercamp@bt.com
From: Zulkhaidir Purwanto
Subject: Application

 Dear Mr. Richard Cunningham
I am writing to apply for the post of camp monitors for the upcoming summer camps.
I received my bachelor's degree three years ago and I am currently enrolled in an English course in at Auckland University of Technology. I have a high level of English speaking ability (C1) as I am in the advanced class in my course. Besides this, I have travelled and received studied in some short course programs in the US and Australia.

As you will see from my CV, I have some relevant experiences for this position. I worked as part-time English teacher for four years while I was in University. I was also involved in English camps as a facilitator in Indonesia. I am an extrovert person, and I like to work with children, and also I am also excellent in working as in a team.

I am enthusiastic on about working outdoors and arranging fun activities. I found managing people as an enjoyable works. I can also swim well and have some camping experience. Therefore, I believe I am a good candidate for this position.

I attach a full CV, and if you require any further information, I would be happy to provide it. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Sincerely
Zulkhaidir Purwanto

 Catatan:
Kata excellent dianggap too strong. Dalam membuat surat, kita diupayakan mencari kata yang lebih diplomatis. Misal, kata excellent ini diganti dengan I work in team well.

 Common errors:
1. Penggunaan article (the, a, an)
Penjelasan mengenai penggunaan article dapat dilihat di tulisan sebelumnya:
- I am currently enrolled in an English course
- I am writing to apply for the post of camp monitors for the upcoming summer camps.
- I have a high level of English speaking ability (C1) as I am in the advanced class
- I was also involved in English camps as a facilitator in Indonesia
- I found managing people as an enjoyable works.

 2. Tidak menggunakan passive form (to be + v3)
- I am currently enrolled in an English course

 3. Penggunaan preposition (in, of, at, on, about)
- I am currently enrolled in an English course in at Auckland University of Technology.
- I am also excellent in working as in a team.
- I am enthusiastic on about working outdoors

 Lihat beberapa grammar correction lainnya:
Grammar Correction 1
Grammar Correction 2
Grammar Correction 3
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